Post by §Tsunami§ on Oct 25, 2011 6:44:44 GMT
This has bothered me. These are actual reviews I found on fanfiction.net They are from the same person, to which I will not apply a name, or a source on where they can be found, for their sake.
1: You're not really killing Tails in only 16 years at the age of 30 are you?
2: Tails never had much power with two tails so having three shouldn't increase it that much. And Cosmo seems very angry with him.
3: There's no reason for Tails to need an item. Cosmo no longer has one since her amulet was destroyed. Note that "her curiosity bursting forth like a flower in bloom" is considered very corny writing.
4: You're kidding about Tails being an experiment I hope.
5: Why are you torturing Tails so much, both past and present? There are many ways of getting sympathy for a character without breaking bones or making him cough up blood. Fights do not have to be violent or crippling to be effective.
6: If this Gary has that kind of power to go to Heaven and ask favors from God then he's far too powerful to be used as a character. That's why the Spectre isn't part of the Justice League. Someone that can do that should appear only extremely rarely and otherwise only be occasionally referred to as being out there somewhere.
All six are not constructive, to various degrees.
And Sure, "I love this story", or, "This is my favorite story!" is also not constructive either.
But lets focus on these six:
1: Never, ever phrase a review in the form of a question. You're reviewing, not asking the author questions. The review isn't helpful or constructive, it (To me), simply seems...snarky.
2: Their first statement could have been better worded. Although her comment really isn't helpful. It doesn't say why, and doesn't point to the author's own writing to caution, nor suggests what to do instead, or what to do next time.
3: Lore is very debatable. Avoid revieiwng about the lore, unless the lore is very important to the story. Her corny writing comment could have been worded more constructively. We aren't berating, we are pointing out helpfully.
4). Is very similar to one. It seems simply insutling, implying (If you do, you're doing it wrong).
5: Is the closest to a constructive review. If the words were phrased a bit differently, it would pass.
6) Like five, it is closer then all of the others, but it is too judging. We aren't reviewing professionaly, but we are certainly trying to help improve. That difference should be noted.
When I find a really nice review, I'll post it below. I'd like to use real reviews. Its easier to learn from. If someone else wishes to take the liberty to...
Leave out their name.
Leave out the title of the story where it was retrieved from.
Then place as you see fit under Constructive, Unconstructive, Only positive, or only negative.
1: You're not really killing Tails in only 16 years at the age of 30 are you?
2: Tails never had much power with two tails so having three shouldn't increase it that much. And Cosmo seems very angry with him.
3: There's no reason for Tails to need an item. Cosmo no longer has one since her amulet was destroyed. Note that "her curiosity bursting forth like a flower in bloom" is considered very corny writing.
4: You're kidding about Tails being an experiment I hope.
5: Why are you torturing Tails so much, both past and present? There are many ways of getting sympathy for a character without breaking bones or making him cough up blood. Fights do not have to be violent or crippling to be effective.
6: If this Gary has that kind of power to go to Heaven and ask favors from God then he's far too powerful to be used as a character. That's why the Spectre isn't part of the Justice League. Someone that can do that should appear only extremely rarely and otherwise only be occasionally referred to as being out there somewhere.
All six are not constructive, to various degrees.
And Sure, "I love this story", or, "This is my favorite story!" is also not constructive either.
But lets focus on these six:
1: Never, ever phrase a review in the form of a question. You're reviewing, not asking the author questions. The review isn't helpful or constructive, it (To me), simply seems...snarky.
2: Their first statement could have been better worded. Although her comment really isn't helpful. It doesn't say why, and doesn't point to the author's own writing to caution, nor suggests what to do instead, or what to do next time.
3: Lore is very debatable. Avoid revieiwng about the lore, unless the lore is very important to the story. Her corny writing comment could have been worded more constructively. We aren't berating, we are pointing out helpfully.
4). Is very similar to one. It seems simply insutling, implying (If you do, you're doing it wrong).
5: Is the closest to a constructive review. If the words were phrased a bit differently, it would pass.
6) Like five, it is closer then all of the others, but it is too judging. We aren't reviewing professionaly, but we are certainly trying to help improve. That difference should be noted.
When I find a really nice review, I'll post it below. I'd like to use real reviews. Its easier to learn from. If someone else wishes to take the liberty to...
Leave out their name.
Leave out the title of the story where it was retrieved from.
Then place as you see fit under Constructive, Unconstructive, Only positive, or only negative.
